Tuesday, 3 November 2009

Blunt

A lonely drop did fall through space

Carrying all colours the sky held ere

The hues blotted and condensed

And stripped the Earth of its face.

Into a chasm, the oceans drained

As every door swung firmly shut

Mountains succumbed in a blurry haze

And colours vanished, as it rained.


The world lived, but shut me away.

Flavours and scents and music, all

Fled me, as I stared benumbed

As it was neither night nor day.


“Help me! Save me!” I should have called.

Instead I hung in a languid state

Like a puppet, in entangled strings

Better would have felt had I been mauled.


A dreary state of animated death

I didn’t know the difference now

The sun didn’t rise, the moon had set

I was dead of all, but breath.

I stared back at the childhood dream

At the hopes and plans and merry things

The tears and laughter of that Heart

This Heart tearing at the seam.


There is no suffering and no pain.

Only, the million hues were gone

To yield a life in gray and black

I am oblivious to the drops of rain.


And forth I go on that quest

To breathe in life; resuscitate

Those lost emotions in this void;

Until then, I shall not rest.

13 comments:

  1. I have started enjoying poetry thanks to you and a few other enlightened superior beings.
    How would you say it? It's music to my ears now.. :)

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  2. So you added a hundred bucks more to Jetty's burgeoning coffers. Until next Thomso, you'll have to dream on, Kondrews!

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  3. @ PPT,

    Glad you like it. But poetry is everyone's art.

    @ Murtha,

    Thanks for reminding us.

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  4. I read the poem three times. I took a good hard look at some of the lines. Just when I thought I was getting a hang of things, I completely lost my mind.
    Beautiful poem nevertheless. I enjoyed every bit of it.

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  5. The ode to the West Wind has been one of my favourite poems, as has Keats' Ode to a nightingale. And hence I liked the theme of your poem a lot!
    Very pleasant read da :)

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  6. @ MGay,

    My first semi-lyrical attempt... Let's say inspired by Vix, Tajo and the like. Thanks da.

    @ Raghav,

    This theme hardly deserves to be compared to Keats' and Shelley's! All the same, Danke.

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  7. That was me btw... Trying to do stuff from Jaggi's comp!

    Kondy

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  8. @ Amit,

    Normally my reply'd have been 'Flyod?!!'
    But seeing you have commented amidst Jaggi+ET Now+Samadhan stuff, 'Thank you'.

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  9. Don't forget watch-out...and Jaggi ?

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  11. i got to know only after 2-3 reads that how beautifuly penned, strong and deep this is... :)

    "Into a chasm, the oceans drained

    As every door swung firmly shut

    Mountains succumbed in a blurry haze

    And colours vanished, as it rained."

    How much more, can an imagery be more pristine, and beautiful, than this, in so less words? :)

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